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mhmm. very controversal, and sometimes incorhent, but the basic message certainly shined through loud and clear the entire time. it creeped me out a bit, i must come to admit, ...

um...fix all your grammer and spelling and confused homophones and then we'll talk. i can't...exactly...get it now, and i'm dreadfully sorry.

by the way, avoid saying "honey" and other pet names... or, at least, just add commas before and after it since it is, after all, an interjection or something of ...

beautiful imagery. it was short but perfect - the title, was an eye catcher, and the poem itself was very good. my favorite parts: floating hair, the tip-touch of red ...

okay, first of all you need to add more to this. or, rather, i think you should. it would certainly help the feeling of the poem. truthfully, i didn't see ...

even though the rhyming pattern was simple, this poem had power. it was beautiful. good, good. now - in the last two stanzas, why brother and sister? what do they ...

good for a first poem, but never take that as an excuse! i'd try to incorporate more poetic language and imagery. also, you had various spelling mistakes. that takes away ...

i hate you. another perfect poem? what's wrong with you? the title - intriging, caught my eye immediately. the poetry - we'll...uh...get to that later. the opening line - not ...

wow. this is fair work for a nine year old. only adding to the critiques - kiss miss ---none of the other lines rhyme, so this sounds out-of-place. VERY nice ...

ok, i don't know if you could make this into any other song but a slow one...and since i can't sing to you over the internet very well (nor do ...

wow...i it didn't have a great rhythm, but that just me trying to make this into a proper critique. truthfully, i thought this poem was really good. it was straightfoward, ...

the last line didn't impress me as the rest of the poem did, and while the second stanza seemed like you were about to stray, you quickly reeled it back ...

You aren’t exactly the strongest person in this world You fall apart by Tuesday afternoon, Plunging yourself into a gray mass of melted newspapers From which maroon butterflies flutter – ...

the second line is too long. could you possibly shorten it? it's sweet, but it wasn't moving. try to use resources of imagery or poetic style. these are very deep ...

3rd line: it floats put IT'S steady. you said "is" rephrase line four, it feels awkward. to surprise is chosen, -- i didn't get that. don't capatilize "silent snowflakes" right, ...